Second placed in the 13 to 17 age category – Wadadli Pen Challenge 2016
Author’s comment: “I love writing poems and reading. Sometimes.”
Judge’s comments (positives only*): “I enjoyed this. It has potential. It caught me right away with the nursery rhyme feel.”
Note: *While only the positives are being shared with the public, in keeping with the development goals of Wadadli Pen, all long listed entries are returned to the author with the judge’s note – both positives and negatives – for revision. Congrats to Diamond (love your name by the way), for placing as high as she did in the contest, for being receptive to and attempting to iron out the poem’s wrinkles – and regret that the Challenge’s resources don’t allow for further opportunity, at this time, to workshop it. I agree with the judge; it has lots of potential. Keep working on your craft; keep valuing your voice and your art. – JCH
Here now is Granny for Sale by Diamond Wayne, 14, science lover, aspiring nurse, and student at Glanvilles Secondary:
A wicked boy named Tom
Pushed his grandmother
Round in a barrow
As he called out loud
As he rang his bell
Granny for sale she nah feed me!
Granny for sale she like beat me!
His friends said as he passed them by.
This poor old lady , we’ll not buy.
He surely must be a mischievous child
To try and sell his only granny; he so wild!
Besides! Said another, if he ask me a very good old lady she always be
So Tom scratched his head and took his granny off the sale
And rang his bell through all the towns
Till he trade his borrow for half a crown
Tom took the half a crown and give it to his granny as a birthday gift.
For placing second in her age category, Diamond received:
A certificate sponsored by the Best of Books
EC$160 (courtesy Dr. Hazra Medica)
Selected Poems by Lorna Goodison (courtesy Pamela Arthurton of Carib World Travel )
Books and a Certificate sponsored by the Best of Books
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